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PostSubject: life flashes   Sun 16 Nov 2008, 7:15 am

pen to pad is how i spit this shit,lights camera its action bitch,life flashed in the form of a kid,now look at what the fuck we did,niggas better know no to trip,for my kid ill empty a clip,pistol always on my hip,leave ya sunk like a battleship,when life flashes oh so fast,off this square ill take another drag,reminessing on the times we had,knowin my future cant get that bad,knowin things cant get much worse,i put my life inside of this verse,ill put my heart inside of the dirt,until the day i become one with the earth,and my niggas know that they mans aint trippin,cause life flashes before all us pimpin,you say you know,well you sure just checkin,cause you gotta stride aint no half steppin,check the record m-town im reppin,then anderson is a very close second,check the track every beat im wreckin,fuck wit mine and the goons will step in,just know thats how the story goes,these arent just some ill ass flows,this is shit comin straight from the dome,make a nigga feel right at home,so my niggas know you are not alone,every nigga in the hood got somethin goin on,bury me a king cause im sitten on the throne,im just a big dog lookin for a bone
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PostSubject: Re: life flashes   Mon 17 Nov 2008, 7:50 am

not bad... same shit as yer other drops.. no real elevation.. pretty basic.. but none the less a decent read..
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PostSubject: ...advice... tak it or leave it...   Tue 18 Nov 2008, 4:06 am

meh... decent.

Flow was pretty tight-knit... a lil' unorthodox... but it werk'd.
Gotta put more of yourself in you rhymes... not jus' some
blurbs about what you'll do and what others can't do to you...

Be a lil' more creative... dig up some shit inside you and try
writing about that...

you'll be suprised at what you'd come up wit',
with flows and content - rhyme schemes and concepts
lines and bomb threats - climbs and contests...
Primes and promises, keep releasin' Honest shit...
Faulter in conscience slips, still... revive the need...
Put thoughts in a context that'll suh'prize them peeps...
Won't deny you feeds or call you material wack...
An' if someone's baggin' on you - jump out and Spit Back!


... keep it simple and your creativity'll take over from there...
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PostSubject: Re: life flashes   Tue 25 Nov 2008, 10:41 am

the gutters callin,im stallin couse i know it wants me all in,
my girls ballin tears fallin sayin she dont want me brawlin,

ive stumbled through the rumbles and never tumbled,
ive been humbled in ths jungle but never crumbled,

the beast has fed on blood ive blead from my head,
ive unleashed lead over over death threats nuff said,
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