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Philisophical@Rappn
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PostSubject: No applause   Sun 16 Nov 2008, 2:05 pm

As i step up to the mic, the room falls silent
Nobody screamin nor yellin, no girls r wildin
Nobody dares to speak, not even one word
There all silent in the room, until i drop my verse
They eyes begin to dialate, there ears begin to burn
My speech is impeceable, astonishing with verbs
Playin a game with these nouns, im the truth when i speak
Words are so influential, they dare not to repeat
They just sit in there chair, or they stand in the crowd
Nobody dares snare, or will they think to frown
Flow smooth as silk, they all just wanna listen
But words are deadly, they dont even know there mission
As im standin there spilling my life into this mic
Nobody is clapping, Are they afraid to bite
When i finish my spit, i look into the surrounding area
I said " was it that bad" or "were my words just scarin ya"
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PostSubject: Re: No applause   Sun 16 Nov 2008, 8:53 pm

haha... yeah..

this gotta HGR feel to it, nah' mean?
the content was aiight... could'uh used
some similies, metas or something to enhance
the delivery of this in it's entirety.
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But words are deadly, they dont even know there mission
sjit... I was feelin' this a bit... would'uh had more impact though
if this line consisted of dual/multiple references to'em not knowing...
Ya' feel me?

Anyway... good flow - ez...
scheme's not original, but was werked well.

Keep droppin' to elevate, Fam.

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PostSubject: Re: No applause   Mon 17 Nov 2008, 7:52 am

not bad man.. good flow.. props on it...
..pretty basic.. i liked it tho..
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PostSubject: Re: No applause   Wed 19 Nov 2008, 9:48 am

thanx for the positive feed
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