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PostSubject: * A 10 Bar Relationship *   Mon 27 Oct 2008, 1:08 am

* Pre-Written... posted on other sites... Just looking for more feeds... *

It's hard on'uh Dedicated Man when His oth'uh-half Claws
Digs in for Ev-ry "Patience Plan" an' jus' Clams the Dawg!

Bursts his Only Conscious Means, Like Bombs inside of Armored Body
Grasps his Solely-Focus, holds it an' Bores it's Calling...

Defeats Purpose... Rendered Worthless, All The While thoughts was Perfect
Weeps Detergent, He needs the Hurtin' to Stop 'Fore He Hurts the Word-Ship

He bleeds to Worship, She needs to ease His Pain wit' Compassion
'have the Audacity to ask'em if His "Writs Not Passion?"

Grab His hand to relax Him... Tell'em She Understands and Knows
That His Struggle wit' "Bein' the Lover" ain't the Man she Holds...

It's His Chance to open Clamps, let the Man be shit She Pic-Tured
like nights of dancin', toasts an' Manship that He believes Is Perks...

Stays close to home even though She over-does all Her Worst Shit
'breaks His Hopes an' takes His Dope while piece'n off Ho's - He Works, Bitch!

Buh' Nonetheless, they Both been' Stressed... Each of the Two Taken Scars...
Internal Burns that Crumble Depths which Both's Faith kept Guard!

So, I guess the moral is; The Hard Part is Jus' Beginning
Two Hearts torn apart by Shit thas' Pittied - It's Sick'Ning!

Buh' I ain't been' torn into For Years, I jus' Solo'd Life...
Dro 2night! ...Hit it! ...Rolled or Piped?


................Man!... this shit Grabs Ahold'uh Mics!...

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PostSubject: Re: * A 10 Bar Relationship *   Tue 04 Nov 2008, 6:30 pm

i liked this alot.. made me kinda write sumthin haha... props on this.. enjoyed it alot man..

Internal Burns that Crumble Depths which Both's Faith kept Guard!
^^was feelin that line the most..
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PostSubject: Re: * A 10 Bar Relationship *   Wed 05 Nov 2008, 12:59 am

nice....nice....

i liked tha emotion, vocab, and flow on this one especially....nice work homie


tha best bar, IMO... was tha opener....or tha closer that one was hot too lol
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